Is True Love Blind?
In my rough draft of this paper, I had some grammatical errors. I went back through and tried to fix most of them so now there should not be many errors if any in my paper. The biggest thing I had to change was my supporting paragraphs. After my first paragraph that I used an example from the book in, I accidentally made a support paragraph. Mr. Spence pointed out that this was good but I needed to do this with all of my paragraphs. So at the end of my other two example paragraphs I added another supporting paragraph that described why the example from the book was relevant to my paper. This allowed all of my thoughts to tie together thus making my paper more organized. After finishing the additional supporting paragraphs, I had to go through and make sure that all of my example paragraphs had quotes from the book in order to show good evidence of blind love in all of my examples. After completing these corrections I was satisfied with my paper.
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Should the "R" Word Be a Swear Word?
In my rough draft of this paper I was missing a good opening. My paper started like this, "The "R" word is a word that people use casually to describe others as being "dumb" or "incapable." What people don't understand is that they are the ones being unintelligent by using the "R" word because the word does not mean dumb nor incapable. The term mentally retarded actually refers to someone who is intellectually handicapped." As you can see this opening is quite bland and does not draw the reader into the story very well. So I added to this with a knew opening using an antidote or lively description. My paper now starts off like this, "Imagine yourself back in high school. You are walking through the hallways and you see a group of friends pass by laughing together, a couple holding hands, and then the classic group of guys picking on some underclassman. They shove him into a locker and say, "Get out of my way you retard!" and keep walking. I know you know what I am talking about because people use the "R" word all the time to put people down. This negativity is around us all of the time yet people rarely realize it." As you can see this opening is much better because it draws the reader in more.
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To view my paper, "Should the "R" Word Be a Swear Word?" click here.
Writing Prompt
With this paper I had a time limit of only 30 minutes to write the whole thing. My rough draft was really quite rough. I made many changes to the piece that helped it including the formating of the papper. I changed it so it had an intro, evidence paragraphs, a rebudle, and a closing paragraphs. There was also many grammer errors that I had to change. After I made all of these changes my paper was much better.
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Final Exam
My final exam was a paper that I wrote describing my development as a reader and writer after taking the English 11A course.
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